Comments for Four Nine and a Half Pictures http://fournineandahalf.com Fri, 15 Jan 2010 08:58:21 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.6 hourly 1 Comment on Help us Write a Logline! by Uma Magal http://fournineandahalf.com/blog/2010/01/02/help-us-write-a-logline/comment-page-1/#comment-20 Uma Magal Fri, 15 Jan 2010 08:58:21 +0000 http://fournineandahalf.com/?p=49#comment-20 Hi Shash and Kerim. Born Criminals or Born Actors? The Chhara let you know. Through their original theater colliding headlong in the process with history, civil society, the courts and police brutality. Good luck :) Hi Shash and Kerim.
Born Criminals or Born Actors? The Chhara let you know. Through their original theater colliding headlong in the process with history, civil society, the courts and police brutality.

Good luck :)

]]> Comment on Help us Write a Logline! by Kerim Friedman http://fournineandahalf.com/blog/2010/01/02/help-us-write-a-logline/comment-page-1/#comment-17 Kerim Friedman Mon, 04 Jan 2010 23:57:12 +0000 http://fournineandahalf.com/?p=49#comment-17 Thanks. Especially to Janet F and Wayne for your excellent suggestions. Please keep the ideas coming! Thanks. Especially to Janet F and Wayne for your excellent suggestions. Please keep the ideas coming!

]]> Comment on Help us Write a Logline! by Wayne http://fournineandahalf.com/blog/2010/01/02/help-us-write-a-logline/comment-page-1/#comment-16 Wayne Mon, 04 Jan 2010 19:30:55 +0000 http://fournineandahalf.com/?p=49#comment-16 Number four was my first choice as it identified the protgonist the objective and the obstacles. The revised logline does not indicate who the protagonist(s) are except to indicate that they call themselves 'born actors' and the stuff after the em dash is necessary as it identifies the obstacles and antagonists. Indian society calls them “born criminals,” but this dedicated group of young actors use theatre to fight back against police brutality, discrimination, and history. Number four was my first choice as it identified the protgonist the objective and the obstacles.
The revised logline does not indicate who the protagonist(s) are except to indicate that they call themselves ‘born actors’ and the stuff after the em dash is necessary as it identifies the obstacles and antagonists.

Indian society calls them “born criminals,” but this dedicated group of young actors use theatre to fight back against police brutality, discrimination, and history.

]]> Comment on Help us Write a Logline! by Neesha Meminger http://fournineandahalf.com/blog/2010/01/02/help-us-write-a-logline/comment-page-1/#comment-15 Neesha Meminger Sun, 03 Jan 2010 17:12:50 +0000 http://fournineandahalf.com/?p=49#comment-15 I prefer #2 as well. Sounds like an amazing film; can't wait to see it. I prefer #2 as well. Sounds like an amazing film; can’t wait to see it.

]]> Comment on Help us Write a Logline! by Janet F http://fournineandahalf.com/blog/2010/01/02/help-us-write-a-logline/comment-page-1/#comment-14 Janet F Sun, 03 Jan 2010 16:39:13 +0000 http://fournineandahalf.com/?p=49#comment-14 “Natural born criminals” or “natural born actors?” The Chhara fight back against police brutality and discrimination through their original art. “Natural born criminals” or “natural born actors?” The Chhara fight back against police brutality and discrimination through their original art.

]]> Comment on Help us Write a Logline! by Zachary http://fournineandahalf.com/blog/2010/01/02/help-us-write-a-logline/comment-page-1/#comment-13 Zachary Sun, 03 Jan 2010 12:26:47 +0000 http://fournineandahalf.com/?p=49#comment-13 None of those really range my bell. Maybe try something like this; In a world where 'chance' and 'future' are uncommon words; these natural"born criminals" have made theater entertainment their vehicle to bring hope and survival to a volatile nation. None of those really range my bell. Maybe try something like this;
In a world where ‘chance’ and ‘future’ are uncommon words; these natural”born criminals” have made theater entertainment their vehicle to bring hope and survival to a volatile nation.

]]> Comment on Help us Write a Logline! by Kerim Friedman http://fournineandahalf.com/blog/2010/01/02/help-us-write-a-logline/comment-page-1/#comment-12 Kerim Friedman Sun, 03 Jan 2010 10:56:34 +0000 http://fournineandahalf.com/?p=49#comment-12 @Sapna, Thanks for your input. This is a logline, so it needs to be short! (Already some Hollywood producer types have told us it is still too long...) There is a longer 1 paragraph treatment of the film which you can read on the film's "about" page, and for proposals we have a 1 page version. @Sapna, Thanks for your input. This is a logline, so it needs to be short! (Already some Hollywood producer types have told us it is still too long…) There is a longer 1 paragraph treatment of the film which you can read on the film’s “about” page, and for proposals we have a 1 page version.

]]> Comment on Help us Write a Logline! by Sapna http://fournineandahalf.com/blog/2010/01/02/help-us-write-a-logline/comment-page-1/#comment-11 Sapna Sun, 03 Jan 2010 10:36:15 +0000 http://fournineandahalf.com/?p=49#comment-11 I wonder if you should try and work in where the community is from or how impoverished they are to give readers an understanding of their motivation for choosing theatre as a way out? But I can understand the need for conciseness as well. Otherwise #4 gets my vote too. I wonder if you should try and work in where the community is from or how impoverished they are to give readers an understanding of their motivation for choosing theatre as a way out? But I can understand the need for conciseness as well. Otherwise #4 gets my vote too.

]]> Comment on Help us Write a Logline! by ilya http://fournineandahalf.com/blog/2010/01/02/help-us-write-a-logline/comment-page-1/#comment-8 ilya Sat, 02 Jan 2010 16:56:32 +0000 http://fournineandahalf.com/?p=49#comment-8 I like 2 and 4, and 2 is better than 4. I like the concise of 2, but the "born actor" of the 4. That means if I had to choose, I would rather pick up concise and try to put rhythm and sound into it. Maybe alternative like this (hope not get you more troublesome): <blockquote>Called “born criminals” by the British, but "born actor" from the heart. The Chhara still live as outcasts, and now they are fighting back with theater.</blockquote> I like 2 and 4, and 2 is better than 4. I like the concise of 2, but the “born actor” of the 4. That means if I had to choose, I would rather pick up concise and try to put rhythm and sound into it. Maybe alternative like this (hope not get you more troublesome):

Called “born criminals” by the British, but “born actor” from the heart. The Chhara still live as outcasts, and now they are fighting back with theater.

]]> Comment on Help us Write a Logline! by Nishant Shah http://fournineandahalf.com/blog/2010/01/02/help-us-write-a-logline/comment-page-1/#comment-7 Nishant Shah Sat, 02 Jan 2010 14:33:00 +0000 http://fournineandahalf.com/?p=49#comment-7 I like the 4th one the best in its structure but I am not sure if "Born actors" counterbalances the 'Born criminal" I'm giving a revised option: They were told they were 'born criminals'. They knew better. Dedicated young Indians from the Charra community, use theatre to tell their own story, fighting against police brutality, discrimination and history. I like the 4th one the best in its structure but I am not sure if “Born actors” counterbalances the ‘Born criminal” I’m giving a revised option:

They were told they were ‘born criminals’. They knew better. Dedicated young Indians from the Charra community, use theatre to tell their own story, fighting against police brutality, discrimination and history.

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